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Lovely Days by ~StandinOnAnOverpass:iconStandinOnAnOverpass:

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You know,
Your piss even smells like cappuchino.
Fingers stained from cigarettes.

You were my heroine.

I'll steal yours
just like I've done before.
Return the favor and raid my species.
My juice.
My fortune.
What a lucky babe.

It's talent.
You have it somewhere.

Scribbles
with the same
blue felt-tipped marker.

A month ago I was still confused.
Today I was relieved.
Five months ago I felt a body.

Now I know.
Confused.
But, I know.

Remember in March you showed me a night on the town?
What a strong happiness.
Do you?

Cheat with me.
We'll be the failures of tomorrow together.
©2004-2009 ~StandinOnAnOverpass
:iconstandinonanoverpass:

Author's Comments

I've deserted Deviant art and writing. I tried tonight, but I don't know.

:: shrugs ::

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~MainstreamCruicifix Jul 1, 2004, 11:19:07 PM
you tried, and i think it is beautiful :)

--
Wenn Gott lebend war, würde er Sie sowieso hassen
:iconphoenix-ignition:
~PhoeNix-iGnitioN Jul 2, 2004, 1:38:59 AM
someone was very addictive, . but it's will always be ok, .
:iconclements:
~clements Jul 2, 2004, 2:10:44 AM
It has flair, and above all vengeance. I love the similes you created. Perhaps toy with some stanzas, making them slightly longer with more description? I enjoyed it.
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`queenhrosie Jul 2, 2004, 12:02:32 PM
I agree with ~clements , more description would be good. But in a way, it gives it a surreal quality that I like. About your mother? Just a guess. Anywho, don't stop writing, whatever you do.

*puts on a bunny suit*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
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~soimgiddy Jul 2, 2004, 7:50:29 PM
you comparisons are very strong.

if you give up on deviantart, I'll just give up too. *cries*
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*leopardivory Jul 2, 2004, 7:58:08 PM
Very nice, I really like this one. :hug: I know what you mean about not being able to write lately, everything I'm writing I think turns out shitty. >.>;

--
:star-empty: ..I'm better off alone anyway.. :star-empty:
:iconjohn2dope:
~john2dope Jul 2, 2004, 11:09:03 PM
pretty good.

--
Words are meaningless, I'd rather let my actions speak for myself.

I'm smiling because I have absolutely no clue whats goin on.
:iconredsephiroth:
~redsephiroth Jul 3, 2004, 7:11:47 PM
strong ending, beautiful work :nod:

--
Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn.
:iconstandinonanoverpass:
~StandinOnAnOverpass Jul 4, 2004, 9:33:09 AM
Thank you thank you thank you

wow
I think it's kinna el sucko and.. :: smacks herself ::
Thank you

--
<3
Ms Jenny


"remember: your present is you."
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